Monday, May 19, 2008
Whole Lotta Dust

Oyama-cho, Shibuya-ku, Tokyo.
Comments:
I feel I want to see more of what is to the right of the frame here, not knowing what was there I cannot comment on whether it would look better with more on that side. The right hand side just feels so open.
I was way too tired when I looked at this last night: I couldn't work out why I wasn't seeing Led Zeppelin!
If I were to be a competition judge, I'm sure I would be one of those that marks down subjects that they don't like: cars leave me a bit cold so I have to look for other features. I'm not sure that there are any here away from the writing in the dust: perhaps the reflections by the bright spot - one of which I presume is you. I think that it needs to go tighter (more abstract use of writing and reflections) or wider to give context.
Nice joke, but I don't think that this one is more than a record of the words. Visually this falls apart from the centre.
Given the shadow line I don't think that there was much you could have done, but tighter might have helped.
Despite the balancing brightness bottom right, the top right triangle seems to suck a lot of the power out of the other shapes.
The white line appearing from the left is confusing me, I cannot work out where it comes from. With the shadow and the white line the image is divided into three.
The dust and grain mix to give a texture to the image.
Blogger is messing me about.....cannot post an image.
It did make me laugh! The title, too.
Like John, I'm no car buff, so have no idea if this might hold more appeal to one who recognizes some "specialness" of this particular car model.
I'd like to see more contrast and detail in the reflections, and I think I'd vote for a wider view since I like the hint of the paver surface under the wheel.
A question that I cannot answer...
How much of what I feel about this photo is caused by the fact that it doesn't look like an akikana photo?
The noise/dust in the dark regions suggest to me that those areas may need to be crushed down a bit. Perhaps doing so would give this a bit more drama, but I'm not sure if that is what is needed.
It took a moment to get the connection, as this was one of those cars that I had hopped to be able to afford in my younger days. Now I am more conncerned about the scatching of the paint by the writing in the dust on the car.
Otherwise, this image is too disjointed for me, with the bit of highlight in the upper right, the strong highlight on the back fender, the shadow crossing the back of the car, etc, etc. sorry, this is just not working for me.
For those that saw the original title of this (and still the title in the URL) I did get my bands and songs mixed up. Was listening to Deep Purple whilst posting...
Anyways, I liked this even if some of the comments are not as generous! It is one of mine and a result of a momentary lapse in to the world of bad 'engrish' that you sometimes stumble over in Japan. I read this first as 'Zed Leppelin' which made me smile. It is parked next to a rather nice small French bistro in our neighbourhood which we sometimes eat at. I believe the car is parked in front of a small design company and does not move very often. Whilst walking the dogs this morning I notice it is still caked in dust though the writing has gone. So it does get cleaned. And therefore in my haste to capture the moment before it rubbed away I had a lot to contend with and perhaps in hindsight I didn't need to come back and shoot this. The sun was high and strong and there was a lot of clutter just outside the edges of this shot. As it was I needed to shoot at this angle to get the lettering to stand out and as a result I had all kinds of problems with what to include and exclude. Photography (like life) should be a constant learning exercise and from the comments here and the difficulty in capturing the shot I will learn plenty!
Thanks for all the constructive feedback - most helpful.
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If I were to be a competition judge, I'm sure I would be one of those that marks down subjects that they don't like: cars leave me a bit cold so I have to look for other features. I'm not sure that there are any here away from the writing in the dust: perhaps the reflections by the bright spot - one of which I presume is you. I think that it needs to go tighter (more abstract use of writing and reflections) or wider to give context.
Given the shadow line I don't think that there was much you could have done, but tighter might have helped.
Despite the balancing brightness bottom right, the top right triangle seems to suck a lot of the power out of the other shapes.
The dust and grain mix to give a texture to the image.
Blogger is messing me about.....cannot post an image.
Like John, I'm no car buff, so have no idea if this might hold more appeal to one who recognizes some "specialness" of this particular car model.
I'd like to see more contrast and detail in the reflections, and I think I'd vote for a wider view since I like the hint of the paver surface under the wheel.
How much of what I feel about this photo is caused by the fact that it doesn't look like an akikana photo?
Otherwise, this image is too disjointed for me, with the bit of highlight in the upper right, the strong highlight on the back fender, the shadow crossing the back of the car, etc, etc. sorry, this is just not working for me.
Anyways, I liked this even if some of the comments are not as generous! It is one of mine and a result of a momentary lapse in to the world of bad 'engrish' that you sometimes stumble over in Japan. I read this first as 'Zed Leppelin' which made me smile. It is parked next to a rather nice small French bistro in our neighbourhood which we sometimes eat at. I believe the car is parked in front of a small design company and does not move very often. Whilst walking the dogs this morning I notice it is still caked in dust though the writing has gone. So it does get cleaned. And therefore in my haste to capture the moment before it rubbed away I had a lot to contend with and perhaps in hindsight I didn't need to come back and shoot this. The sun was high and strong and there was a lot of clutter just outside the edges of this shot. As it was I needed to shoot at this angle to get the lettering to stand out and as a result I had all kinds of problems with what to include and exclude. Photography (like life) should be a constant learning exercise and from the comments here and the difficulty in capturing the shot I will learn plenty!
Thanks for all the constructive feedback - most helpful.
