Sunday, March 02, 2008
Push
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I wasn't sure about posting this as 'I'd had my go' with the previous one. I was left with a feeling of imbalance with the previous version. This doesn't have that feeling however now I feel the dog is disconnected, the image is fulfilled in the top half.
I post as I would like your views.
The repeat of the line between dog and children, and the increased visibility of the dog's face make for a more satisfying result.
Also the junction of the wave and groyne works with the children rather than against them.
"push" is the linguistic equivalent of PS, the boy is merely balancing himself! The forward tilt of the boy jumping does improve the picture and, although I didn't mind the dog's tail being out of the right hand edge, its leftward wag also helps.
Much better than the earlier take. The tight crop above the falling boy plays well with his angle of motion. As there is something of interest going on everyone is looking keenly on. A slight hint of movement in the dog's tail suggest it perhaps wants to join in the fun too.
Much better all the way around compared to the earlier image. Hint of blur, interaction of all and the suspense. Detail in the shadows with the water highlights, well done.
The way the three children line up gives this a more 'finished' feel. Much better than the last one.
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I post as I would like your views.
Also the junction of the wave and groyne works with the children rather than against them.