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johnjo: a couple of clues: this is the back of the train and the station is not a terminus.
 

A little dodging and burning might make the figure pop out from the background
 

Not quite working compositionally. I like the idea and admire your descent off the platform but one is left asking what is the main subject: if it is the guard his gloves get lost against two different bits of white background and his figure is a little bit too central (and indistinct) for all the use of the train and platform to counter that. The almost truncated 365 on the train betrays either inappropriate cropping or a bit of bad luck in the framing. Your main enemy is the construction work, which should be there by my rule of realism but ends up causing some of the difficulties over composition. I also have a feeling that the dark areas have been pulled up too much, not only leading to a lack of contrast but showing some rougher grain.
 

The second figure! Nobody has mentioned the second figure.
 

That's interesting what you say, Auspicious. It is very strange, but I noticed the other figure at the beginning but progressively forgot about him; I'm not sure that he is critical to the photo though - is he? The guard is waiting, but not necessarily for him.
 

The guard is waiting, but not necessarily for him.

Or is it a second guard/white glove person to shove unsuspecting commuters onto overloaded trains.
 

It's all about the second smaller figure (plus a little about the unusual point of view). The smaller figure is in almost an identical pose as the guard which is what caught my eye when I scanned this first time round. As a couple of you have commented, I need a lot of work on this to bring it home.

Taken from the level crossing at the end of the platform.

Thanks for all the valuable feedback.
 

It is interesting the thoughts and memories brought to the fore when looking at an image.

This reminded me that we kill our railway workers in the UK by letting them get hit by trains. In Japan they do not. As I recall, in Japan they have ritualised the act of crossing the lines for their workmen. They are taught to approach the line and then point, with an extended arm, up and down the line. It is impossible to perform this pointing without looking as well. I have used this ritualisation at work to avoid operators making errors, it works. (Poka Yoke)